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Friday, June 6, 2008
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Intro to paper rewrite choice
For my rewrite option, I choose paper #2 on community. I could have chosen any one of the paper, since they all need huge amounts of work. I choose this one because it seemed like I could express more of my thoughts without totally deleting the first paper and starting over.
Rewrite of paper #2
Professor Harrington/Huntington
English 101 O/L
9 May 2008
Community
When you hear the word community, many people would immediately think of the town or part of the city in which they live. The term community can have a different meaning altogether. A community can refer to a segment of people who live together and share a way of life, like a farming commune. Another type of community can be on the INTERNET, like Myspace. In his essay, You Are Who You Know, Andrew Leonard writes "Particularly in the developed world, our atomized, alienated, transient lifestyles have resulted in our seeking community from those who share the same interests, or workplace, or some other kind of tribal loyalty." (155) Whether they realize it or not, people identify themselves through others they surround themselves with.
The workplace is a popular place to form a community. An example of this is a police department. The officers on the force refer to each other as brothers. They support each other, cover each others' backs, listen to their problems, socialize together, and console and take care of the family members of a fallen officers' family. The police community is a "closed" community. A person cannot just walk in off the street and become part of the community. To get into this community, a person must become an officer, train with a seasoned officer to learn the ways of the community, and then they are a member for live.
Communities formed on the internet are a completely different type of thing. There really is no personal face to face interaction. Myspace, for example, is a collection of pictures and stories about millions of different people. The more "friends" you have on Myspace, the more you can brag to others. Leonard referenced internet friends as not really true friends. He says "When so many people are your friends, can those "friendships" be worth much?"(150) A true friend is someone who is there when you need them to provide support, comfort, and companionship. An internet community of friends cannot provide this over a DSL connection. This type of community isn't really stable. People come and go, just with a click. One day you can have a friend, the next day they delete you from their life. Chances are you have never met them in person, or have any personal contact information except a email address. You may never know what happened to the friendship, or what happened to them. These type of friends cannot provide a support system because they may not be there when you need them.
Sadly, in our society, there are many people who feel they cannot fit into society. They feel uncomfortable around real physical people. By associating with people only on the internet, they can be who or whatever they want, and there really isn't the fear of rejection. Since there is no face to face meeting, they cannot be judged by their appearance or who they are. This is where the good side of an internet community can be seen. On the internet, they can have friends and interact with others in a healthy way. It gives them a chance to be who ever they want to be. It can make a shy person a social butterfly, giving them the courage to speak to others through their screen, perhaps giving them a much happier life. Jennifer Bishop Fulwiler writes about Friendster.com "It's the best website, any, the best service ever to be created in the history of mankind."(156) It's a 24/7 friend, with all that person's friends becoming your friend with just a click. Friendster.com allows members to search out friends that have similar interests and likes and allows you to become friends with them.
Communities can be found everywhere. They can be found in every workplace. A neighborhood bar where the "regulars" gather everyday. A police station, fire department, even a hospital. People can belong to several different communities also. In the morning, stopping everyday at Starbuck's and socializing with the people in that community and then at work and being in that community. Going home and getting on line and becoming part of that community. The common thread is all these different communities hold things that interest us. The people who belong to these communities also hold the same interests and likes we do, therefore it is easy for us to feel a sense of belonging and feel that the community is supportive of us. They understand our views and opinions and will usually agree with them. These communities help us to form who we really are. Community gives us our identity, gives us a sense of belonging and of being wanted. Without that, a person really doesn't have an identity.
Latterelll, Catherine G. Remix reading + composing culture Bedford ST Martins 2006
English 101 O/L
9 May 2008
Community
When you hear the word community, many people would immediately think of the town or part of the city in which they live. The term community can have a different meaning altogether. A community can refer to a segment of people who live together and share a way of life, like a farming commune. Another type of community can be on the INTERNET, like Myspace. In his essay, You Are Who You Know, Andrew Leonard writes "Particularly in the developed world, our atomized, alienated, transient lifestyles have resulted in our seeking community from those who share the same interests, or workplace, or some other kind of tribal loyalty." (155) Whether they realize it or not, people identify themselves through others they surround themselves with.
The workplace is a popular place to form a community. An example of this is a police department. The officers on the force refer to each other as brothers. They support each other, cover each others' backs, listen to their problems, socialize together, and console and take care of the family members of a fallen officers' family. The police community is a "closed" community. A person cannot just walk in off the street and become part of the community. To get into this community, a person must become an officer, train with a seasoned officer to learn the ways of the community, and then they are a member for live.
Communities formed on the internet are a completely different type of thing. There really is no personal face to face interaction. Myspace, for example, is a collection of pictures and stories about millions of different people. The more "friends" you have on Myspace, the more you can brag to others. Leonard referenced internet friends as not really true friends. He says "When so many people are your friends, can those "friendships" be worth much?"(150) A true friend is someone who is there when you need them to provide support, comfort, and companionship. An internet community of friends cannot provide this over a DSL connection. This type of community isn't really stable. People come and go, just with a click. One day you can have a friend, the next day they delete you from their life. Chances are you have never met them in person, or have any personal contact information except a email address. You may never know what happened to the friendship, or what happened to them. These type of friends cannot provide a support system because they may not be there when you need them.
Sadly, in our society, there are many people who feel they cannot fit into society. They feel uncomfortable around real physical people. By associating with people only on the internet, they can be who or whatever they want, and there really isn't the fear of rejection. Since there is no face to face meeting, they cannot be judged by their appearance or who they are. This is where the good side of an internet community can be seen. On the internet, they can have friends and interact with others in a healthy way. It gives them a chance to be who ever they want to be. It can make a shy person a social butterfly, giving them the courage to speak to others through their screen, perhaps giving them a much happier life. Jennifer Bishop Fulwiler writes about Friendster.com "It's the best website, any, the best service ever to be created in the history of mankind."(156) It's a 24/7 friend, with all that person's friends becoming your friend with just a click. Friendster.com allows members to search out friends that have similar interests and likes and allows you to become friends with them.
Communities can be found everywhere. They can be found in every workplace. A neighborhood bar where the "regulars" gather everyday. A police station, fire department, even a hospital. People can belong to several different communities also. In the morning, stopping everyday at Starbuck's and socializing with the people in that community and then at work and being in that community. Going home and getting on line and becoming part of that community. The common thread is all these different communities hold things that interest us. The people who belong to these communities also hold the same interests and likes we do, therefore it is easy for us to feel a sense of belonging and feel that the community is supportive of us. They understand our views and opinions and will usually agree with them. These communities help us to form who we really are. Community gives us our identity, gives us a sense of belonging and of being wanted. Without that, a person really doesn't have an identity.
Latterelll, Catherine G. Remix reading + composing culture Bedford ST Martins 2006
original selection for re-write selection paper 2
Professor Harrington/Huntington good MLA awesome
English 101 O/L
9 May 2008
Community
When you hear the word community, many people would immediately think of the town or part of the city in which they live. The term community can have a different meaning altogether. A community can refer to a segment of people who live together and share a way of life, like a farming commune. Another type of community can be on the INTERNET, like Myspace. In his essay, “You Are Who You Know,” (in MLA the essay is in quotes)Andrew Leonard writes, "Particularly in the developed world, our atomized, alienated, transient lifestyles have resulted in our seeking community from those who share the same interests, or workplace, or some other kind of tribal loyalty." (155) Whether they realize it or not, people identify themselves through others they surround themselves with. These people tend to think alike and support each other through friendship. This is really a statement of fact, not a thesis—remember you are setting up your argument.
The workplace is a popular place to form a community. An example of this is a police department. The officers on the force refer to each other as brothers. They support each other, cover each others' backs, listen to their problems, socialize together, and console and take care of the family members of a fallen officers' family. The police community is a "closed" community. A person cannot just walk in off the street and become part of the community. To get into this community, a person must become an officer, train with a seasoned officer to learn the ways of the community, and then they are a member for live. You’ve defined this community for me and it’s an interesting one—but what about the prompt?
Communities formed on the INTERNET(no need to capitalize it) are a completely different type of thing. There really is no personal face to face interaction. Myspace, for example, is a collection of pictures and stories about millions of different people. The more "friends" you have on Myspace, the more you can brag to others. Leonard referenced INTERNET friends as not really true friends. He says "When so many people are your friends, can those "friendships" be worth much?"(150) A true friend is someone who is there when you need them to provide support, comfort, and companionship. An INTERNET community of friends cannot provide this over a DSL connection. This type of community isn't really stable. People come and go, just with a click. One day you can have a friend, the next day they delete you from their life. Chances are you have never met them in person, or have any personal contact information except a email address. You may never know what happened to the friendship, or what happened to them. These type of friends cannot provide a support system because they may not be there when you need them. Ok, now I see you trying to answer the prompt.
Sadly, in our society, there are many people who feel they cannot fit into society. They feel uncomfortable around real physical people. ??I’m not sure what you mean by this? This is where the good side of an INTERNET community can be seen. On the INTERNET, they can have friends and interact with others in a healthy way. It gives them a chance to be who ever they want to be. It can make a shy person a social butterfly, giving them the courage to speak to others through their screen, perhaps giving them a much happier life. Jennifer Bishop Fulwiler writes about Friendster.com "It's the best website, any, the best service ever to be created in the history of mankind."(156) It's a 24/7 friend, with all that person's friends becoming your friend with just a click. Friendster.com allows members to search out friends that have similar interests and likes and allows you to become friends with them. Ok, good, you’ve provided an anti-thesis.
Communities can be found everywhere. They can be found in every workplace. A neighborhood bar where the "regulars" gather everyday. A police station, fire department, even a hospital. People can belong to several different communities also. In the morning, stopping everyday at Starbuck's and socializing with the people in that community and then at work and being in that community. Going home and getting on line and becoming part of that community. The common thread is all these different communities hold things that interest us. The people who belong to these communities also hold the same interests and likes we do, therefore it is easy for us to feel a sense of belonging and feel that the community is supportive of us. They understand our views and opinions and will usually agree with them. These communities help us to form who we really are.
Hi Jennifer,
What hinders this is the lack of a strong controlling idea. I see your attempt to bring in support from the reading and you picked two interesting essays. What’s missing is more of your own analysis. What does what you say about each essay all add up to? I look for the conclusions you are drawing, the “so what” about what the authors are saying and the “so what” about how you are connecting them. Your essay gets stronger as you go so I also wonder if another draft would have helped. In your next essay really concentrate on following the prompt and getting a good controlling idea of thesis up front. Did you get help in the Writing Studio? You might try that for your next paper. Let me know if you have any questions. –Ann Grade: 78
Latterelll, Catherine G. Remix reading + composing culture Bedford ST Martins 2006
English 101 O/L
9 May 2008
Community
When you hear the word community, many people would immediately think of the town or part of the city in which they live. The term community can have a different meaning altogether. A community can refer to a segment of people who live together and share a way of life, like a farming commune. Another type of community can be on the INTERNET, like Myspace. In his essay, “You Are Who You Know,” (in MLA the essay is in quotes)Andrew Leonard writes, "Particularly in the developed world, our atomized, alienated, transient lifestyles have resulted in our seeking community from those who share the same interests, or workplace, or some other kind of tribal loyalty." (155) Whether they realize it or not, people identify themselves through others they surround themselves with. These people tend to think alike and support each other through friendship. This is really a statement of fact, not a thesis—remember you are setting up your argument.
The workplace is a popular place to form a community. An example of this is a police department. The officers on the force refer to each other as brothers. They support each other, cover each others' backs, listen to their problems, socialize together, and console and take care of the family members of a fallen officers' family. The police community is a "closed" community. A person cannot just walk in off the street and become part of the community. To get into this community, a person must become an officer, train with a seasoned officer to learn the ways of the community, and then they are a member for live. You’ve defined this community for me and it’s an interesting one—but what about the prompt?
Communities formed on the INTERNET(no need to capitalize it) are a completely different type of thing. There really is no personal face to face interaction. Myspace, for example, is a collection of pictures and stories about millions of different people. The more "friends" you have on Myspace, the more you can brag to others. Leonard referenced INTERNET friends as not really true friends. He says "When so many people are your friends, can those "friendships" be worth much?"(150) A true friend is someone who is there when you need them to provide support, comfort, and companionship. An INTERNET community of friends cannot provide this over a DSL connection. This type of community isn't really stable. People come and go, just with a click. One day you can have a friend, the next day they delete you from their life. Chances are you have never met them in person, or have any personal contact information except a email address. You may never know what happened to the friendship, or what happened to them. These type of friends cannot provide a support system because they may not be there when you need them. Ok, now I see you trying to answer the prompt.
Sadly, in our society, there are many people who feel they cannot fit into society. They feel uncomfortable around real physical people. ??I’m not sure what you mean by this? This is where the good side of an INTERNET community can be seen. On the INTERNET, they can have friends and interact with others in a healthy way. It gives them a chance to be who ever they want to be. It can make a shy person a social butterfly, giving them the courage to speak to others through their screen, perhaps giving them a much happier life. Jennifer Bishop Fulwiler writes about Friendster.com "It's the best website, any, the best service ever to be created in the history of mankind."(156) It's a 24/7 friend, with all that person's friends becoming your friend with just a click. Friendster.com allows members to search out friends that have similar interests and likes and allows you to become friends with them. Ok, good, you’ve provided an anti-thesis.
Communities can be found everywhere. They can be found in every workplace. A neighborhood bar where the "regulars" gather everyday. A police station, fire department, even a hospital. People can belong to several different communities also. In the morning, stopping everyday at Starbuck's and socializing with the people in that community and then at work and being in that community. Going home and getting on line and becoming part of that community. The common thread is all these different communities hold things that interest us. The people who belong to these communities also hold the same interests and likes we do, therefore it is easy for us to feel a sense of belonging and feel that the community is supportive of us. They understand our views and opinions and will usually agree with them. These communities help us to form who we really are.
Hi Jennifer,
What hinders this is the lack of a strong controlling idea. I see your attempt to bring in support from the reading and you picked two interesting essays. What’s missing is more of your own analysis. What does what you say about each essay all add up to? I look for the conclusions you are drawing, the “so what” about what the authors are saying and the “so what” about how you are connecting them. Your essay gets stronger as you go so I also wonder if another draft would have helped. In your next essay really concentrate on following the prompt and getting a good controlling idea of thesis up front. Did you get help in the Writing Studio? You might try that for your next paper. Let me know if you have any questions. –Ann Grade: 78
Latterelll, Catherine G. Remix reading + composing culture Bedford ST Martins 2006
Intro to Critical Thinking piece
For my critical thinking piece, I chose my timed writing #2 about the movie "Lone Star". I really enjoyed the movie and found the story to be very interesting. It was a "thinking" type of movie, making the watcher have to think to follow the plot. The movie and the writing prompts caused thought on the subject matter of the movie, a covered up murder, brother-sister relationship, affairs, and sorted other details.
Critical Thinking-timed writing #2
Jennifer Lewis Timed writing 2
Everyone has their own personal perceptions of what non-conformity and conformity are. What might be an acceptable way of life for someone might make another person angry or uncomfortable. The movie Lone Star is about a small town on the Texas Mexico border completely controlled by the sheriff. In the movie, it seems that most of the town was living a life of non-conformity.
Some people strive to live a life that is non-conforming. They try to be different from the society they live and want everyone to notice it. In the movie, there is a scene where two people are sitting in a booth, talking about marriage. No so out of place, except the man is white and the woman is black and this is southern Texas. From the conservation that is being carried on at the bar, this is not a common thing in their small town. The bartender commented to the sheriff how the previous sheriff would have warned them about how this type of thing may not be good. My perception of inter racial marriage is that people should marry who they love, no matter what the color. These two people choose to live a type of life that did not conform with the community they lived in, and they didn't try to hide it.
Hiding non-conformity seemed to be more common in the film. Sra Cruz was from Mexico. She tried to hide that by saying she was Spanish and always spoke English and wanted everyone who worked for her to speak English only. She called the Border Patrol on other Mexicans she would see crossing the border illegally, while she hired them to work for her. Sam and Pilar choose to be together, knowing they were half brother and sister. No one else knew except Sra Cruz, who was Pilar's mother. They had been hiding their relationship from her, thinking she wouldn't approve, but for the wrong reason. She knew that by them being together, it would be very non-conforming and a taboo in society. In the end, they choose to be together anyway, hiding their non-conformity. In time, what is a non-conformity may become acceptable to society.
Is it ok to kill someone to save another? The dead sheriff in the film, Sheriff Wade, was a horrible man who killed anyone he didn't like or who questioned his ways. He was killed by his deputy, Hollis, who by doing so, saved the life of a black man named Payne. I don't believe it is ok to kill anyone, but maybe in this instance it is. The discussion group seemed to have mixed feelings on this also. Some thought it was ok, others didn't. Everyone had their own opinions and their own personal reasons for their beliefs
Everyone has their own personal perceptions of what non-conformity and conformity are. What might be an acceptable way of life for someone might make another person angry or uncomfortable. The movie Lone Star is about a small town on the Texas Mexico border completely controlled by the sheriff. In the movie, it seems that most of the town was living a life of non-conformity.
Some people strive to live a life that is non-conforming. They try to be different from the society they live and want everyone to notice it. In the movie, there is a scene where two people are sitting in a booth, talking about marriage. No so out of place, except the man is white and the woman is black and this is southern Texas. From the conservation that is being carried on at the bar, this is not a common thing in their small town. The bartender commented to the sheriff how the previous sheriff would have warned them about how this type of thing may not be good. My perception of inter racial marriage is that people should marry who they love, no matter what the color. These two people choose to live a type of life that did not conform with the community they lived in, and they didn't try to hide it.
Hiding non-conformity seemed to be more common in the film. Sra Cruz was from Mexico. She tried to hide that by saying she was Spanish and always spoke English and wanted everyone who worked for her to speak English only. She called the Border Patrol on other Mexicans she would see crossing the border illegally, while she hired them to work for her. Sam and Pilar choose to be together, knowing they were half brother and sister. No one else knew except Sra Cruz, who was Pilar's mother. They had been hiding their relationship from her, thinking she wouldn't approve, but for the wrong reason. She knew that by them being together, it would be very non-conforming and a taboo in society. In the end, they choose to be together anyway, hiding their non-conformity. In time, what is a non-conformity may become acceptable to society.
Is it ok to kill someone to save another? The dead sheriff in the film, Sheriff Wade, was a horrible man who killed anyone he didn't like or who questioned his ways. He was killed by his deputy, Hollis, who by doing so, saved the life of a black man named Payne. I don't believe it is ok to kill anyone, but maybe in this instance it is. The discussion group seemed to have mixed feelings on this also. Some thought it was ok, others didn't. Everyone had their own opinions and their own personal reasons for their beliefs
Thursday, June 5, 2008
Intro to voice and audience piece
For this piece, I choose the blog entry on Tradition. I liked how it told the story of how our tradition vanished from my family. I think that when a person becomes a adult and they have a new family, the traditions from their childhood seem to become pushed to the past.
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